Revision Plan - Forme

Story Text: After revising and line-editing last week, I got the audio down to three minutes which gives me enough room to add the videos, images and sounds. As far as the text is concerned I will probably have to edit it again in the coming weeks when I receive feedbacks from the class.

Audio Images and Videos: I was able to find a solution to get a clean recording. I will have to rerecord again after feedback. Since I am working my own video clips, I always have to re-record the video each time I change something in the story. So I am planning on getting most of my video online. I tried University of Pittsburgh archives videos but I did not find what I am looking for yet. I will still be looking for the right ones. With what I have so far, I will work on re-structuring the story to have a clear plan. I will still have couple shootings of myself telling the story, but it will be limited to 3-5 clips. I will have one at the start of the story, another one showing me looking around. There will be 1-2 scenarios, comic I hope, depicting me asking myself questions and trying to understand what is happening to me.

I will also have still pictures. So far I have what I want to use. I don’t think I will be working on them unless I feel the need to do so after I receive feedbacks from class.

Background Sounds: I got a lot of sounds online and I have already inserted them to my story. It seems a bit noisy though, especially the classroom noise and chatter I inserted. I am playing with the volume, but I still feel like it is distracting. I am thinking it might be due to the fact that I am not being able to take my focus away from the background sounds. I hope I will judge better in the next couple weeks when I work on the rest of the story.

Revision Plan - Gabriela Tremont

I’ve made a few changes since our last copy was due. I shortened my audio clip and made sure I incorporated only sentences that I felt were necessary to tell my story. I removed a sentence that began with “I realized,” and I tried to ask more meaningful, less-cliché questions. I kept all of my pictures from France in black and white, but I changed the pictures from Italy back to color. I also incorporated a few new videos that I took while abroad. These include videos from France and Italy.  I’m still working on editing those.

I plan to find more relevant still images for my video. I want them to be authentic and genuine depictions of my family. I’ve found that I have a solid number of pictures from France because I was there so long, but not enough from Italy. I mention several names of family members in Italy, but I don’t have photos of all of them to show. In the near future, I’d like to obtain some old family photos to incorporate. I’m having a bit of a hard time accessing these because they’re at my house in New York.  When I go home for thanksgiving break I plan to find a multitude of these photos and add them into my project.

I think my old family photos will illustrate an interesting and authentic view of my family. I mention how the last time I met my family in Italy, I was only a year old. I’d like to incorporate pictures from that event. Other than that, I’m also interested in adding more sounds to my video. Perhaps the addition of city sounds in the very beginning would render themselves well. I’m currently working to remove photos from my video that feel too impersonal. 

Revision Plan

I feel like my story has grown and developed a lot since the beginning of the semester. But i am still having some issues with the way my story is being perceived. I think the problem might be that I need to add a more personal touch to the story. Adding still photos was succesful in representing my overall story and concept but I feel that by adding videos and personal photos I can create the story I am envisioning.

I think my audio part is pretty set and I am happy with the way it turned out but I am going to re-record my voice and take out some unnecessary words. After looking at my transcript, I believe I am using the word "and" a little too much so I am going to get rid of all the unnecessary "ands."

Although I want to add personal videos I definitely still want to keep some still photos in my story. I have recently learned how to create the Ken Burns pan and zoom effect in Premiere Pro so I am going to implement my new found knowledge to add effects to my images and give them life.

I am also going to make some technical changes to my story and the way everything is layed out. My story is a figurative metaphor so I want to split my story into parts. The first part where would be the literal representation of the story I am telling and then I want there to be an abrupt transition so that the second half can be easily perceived as the metaphor. Another thing I am adding is short clips of my life to represent the whole metaphor of "going through life" and "growing up." I am using my phone to take quick videos of my day-to-day activities and then I am going to import them into premiere and edit them so they flow together nicely. I believe by adding these elements to my story I will be able to finally create the story I have envisioned.

Creating a Ken Burns Zoom Effect

1. In order to create a Ken Burns pan and zoom effect we will have to establish key frames for the zoom and position parameters.

2. First, choose the image that you want to add the effect to.

3. With this clip selected you can navigate your cursor to the very FIRST frame of the clip. This is where you are going to place your first keyframe.

4. Go to the effects controls located near the top of the window.

5. Click the stopwatch icon next to the SCALE and POSITION parameters. By doing this you have added your first keyframe for the scale and position of the clip.

6. Premiere Pro automatically adds keyframes when a parameter is adjusted.

7. Now navigate to the very LAST frame of the clip to adjust your scale and position parameters. Increase the scale a little bit and adjust the position to add zoom effect into the main subject of the image.

8. Make sure the scale is slightly lower at the FIRST keyframe.

How to remove background in Adobe Premiere

Revision Plan

For my next revision I plan to re-record my audio but work majority on adding video and improving my images. There's a certain bigger picture I am striving to achieve with my piece and improving my images and adding video is, I feel, key to achieving this. 

         

I edited my audio script line-for-line. Refining my sentences and taking out unnecessary or wordy language really made a big difference.

Next, I plan on using some techniques to make my images look alive. Almost like they are moving. Hopefully I can do it with just my camera but it’s possible I might use some Premiere techniques or even Photoshop. I also need to work on sizing my pictures. A few of them were too large and I wasn’t able to size them to fit the Premier frame. I was able to figure out how to size them and will be implementing that for my next revision.

  

Lastly, I plan to add video. Currently I don’t have any video in my project. Adding video will really heighten the experience I hope to convey to my audience. The videos I plan to add will be short in length but it would be interesting to play with video effects. I don’t have a lot of experience with video so this will be a learning experience. But I really think it would add a great deal to my project. I plan to learn all that I can and implement it to video that I already have and add new video as well.

Overall, I’m refining my audio script, adjusting and improving my images and adding video with certain video techniques.

Revision Plan

My story has developed a lot since the beginning of the term. I have revised my storyline a lot throughout this process, not only adjusting my general direction of where I wanted to go with it, but also with my words and how I portray my point of view to my audience. The majority of the changes that I have already made to my story were the text itself. My story started out being very black and white and a literal representation of what it stood for to me. Upon revisiting it, I started to see the potential it held for a more figurative representation and decided to go with that instead. Since my idea evolved and my photos were a visual representation of my spoken words, I realized that I may have to rework my entire script, which I did recently. I feel that now, my story portrays to my audience what I intended it to do in the first place. I feel that I have properly conveyed my story through my words and sounds, but now I still need to do more revisions to make the visuals of my story match the words and ideas that I want to leave my audience with.

Some of the other changes I have already made have to do with the technical aspects of my project. I have smoothed out my flip-book-eqsue clip, as well as the blurred lake image in the beginning of the film. Since I have been working on the project throughout this revision process, I feel that the only major task left is to fine tune the visuals and make them as authentic as I want the story to be.

After presenting my working story to the class, I realized that my visuals need a lot more work. Now that my story has evolved, my visual translation needs to evolve more as well. The images that I currently have work in some places, but I intend to make them match up more with the words as I speak them, and also to add more content in order to reduce the black space that exists currently. One idea from a classmate is to show myself growing up overtime as I talk about how camp has helped me grow and mature. Since I want to maintain the authenticity of the photographs and use only my own or those that actually were taken at my camp, this use of visuals would fit in perfectly. I also would like to find more photos of my friends and I at camp that match figuratively or literally to my text.