Revision Plan

My story has developed a lot since the beginning of the term. I have revised my storyline a lot throughout this process, not only adjusting my general direction of where I wanted to go with it, but also with my words and how I portray my point of view to my audience. The majority of the changes that I have already made to my story were the text itself. My story started out being very black and white and a literal representation of what it stood for to me. Upon revisiting it, I started to see the potential it held for a more figurative representation and decided to go with that instead. Since my idea evolved and my photos were a visual representation of my spoken words, I realized that I may have to rework my entire script, which I did recently. I feel that now, my story portrays to my audience what I intended it to do in the first place. I feel that I have properly conveyed my story through my words and sounds, but now I still need to do more revisions to make the visuals of my story match the words and ideas that I want to leave my audience with.

Some of the other changes I have already made have to do with the technical aspects of my project. I have smoothed out my flip-book-eqsue clip, as well as the blurred lake image in the beginning of the film. Since I have been working on the project throughout this revision process, I feel that the only major task left is to fine tune the visuals and make them as authentic as I want the story to be.

After presenting my working story to the class, I realized that my visuals need a lot more work. Now that my story has evolved, my visual translation needs to evolve more as well. The images that I currently have work in some places, but I intend to make them match up more with the words as I speak them, and also to add more content in order to reduce the black space that exists currently. One idea from a classmate is to show myself growing up overtime as I talk about how camp has helped me grow and mature. Since I want to maintain the authenticity of the photographs and use only my own or those that actually were taken at my camp, this use of visuals would fit in perfectly. I also would like to find more photos of my friends and I at camp that match figuratively or literally to my text.