Revision Plan - Gabriela Tremont

I’ve made a few changes since our last copy was due. I shortened my audio clip and made sure I incorporated only sentences that I felt were necessary to tell my story. I removed a sentence that began with “I realized,” and I tried to ask more meaningful, less-cliché questions. I kept all of my pictures from France in black and white, but I changed the pictures from Italy back to color. I also incorporated a few new videos that I took while abroad. These include videos from France and Italy.  I’m still working on editing those.

I plan to find more relevant still images for my video. I want them to be authentic and genuine depictions of my family. I’ve found that I have a solid number of pictures from France because I was there so long, but not enough from Italy. I mention several names of family members in Italy, but I don’t have photos of all of them to show. In the near future, I’d like to obtain some old family photos to incorporate. I’m having a bit of a hard time accessing these because they’re at my house in New York.  When I go home for thanksgiving break I plan to find a multitude of these photos and add them into my project.

I think my old family photos will illustrate an interesting and authentic view of my family. I mention how the last time I met my family in Italy, I was only a year old. I’d like to incorporate pictures from that event. Other than that, I’m also interested in adding more sounds to my video. Perhaps the addition of city sounds in the very beginning would render themselves well. I’m currently working to remove photos from my video that feel too impersonal.