Revision Plan

As my project currently stands, there are a lot of directions that I can contemplate going in and each little detail that I change or add seems to slightly change the way that I view the story that I’m telling. My story stands around two and a half minutes, though I could still slow down my speech a little more – that is one of my biggest problems, as I tend to be a relatively quick speaker. I plan on slowing down a little more but I also want to re-evaluate all of the descriptive words in my piece and make them more sensory because it was such a sensory experience. I have begun to add music, specifically that of the artist it is about, and had placed other small sounds into the piece, but I need to make sure that those sounds are not overkill that I’ve placed in there just for the sake of adding sound. That won’t make up a good project and the timing of all of the audio is key. I am adding video in the place of some of the still images from various places and plan to look at the project as a whole to make sure that it doesn’t look too computer-processed like the rabbit hole portion of my first draft. One of the biggest things that I want to change, though, is that I want to add to my story. After rereading it a little bit, I understand as an outsider why the narrator is telling you the story, but I don’t completely get that magical, almost surreal feeling that I was trying to convey to the audience and I’m trying to find the words to do that. Every aspect of the piece will have changed in some way since the last draft, as I’m sure it should. I want to take out the “I” words and replace them with group actions as the piece progresses and focus in on specific little details. I believe that the biggest challenge will be the narration-music combination. I’m such a visual person that I understand how to make my images and video convey a feeling, but the audio will be a little bit more difficult to tweak.